new track online - feedback please

my first real effort in terms of writing my own music. yes its raw and unmastered, not entirely happy with some of the samples but i actually like the track as a whole. smoke a phat one and put this on the headphones and see where ya head takes you

anyways mostly for the guys and girls who know a bit about production and can offer some constructive criticism or give me some helpful feeback.

track is made with FLStudio 4 with nothing but stock standard soft synths (3Osc, TS404, DX10) and a bunch of samples i think Mick (Narc) gave to me as a birthday pressy which i dug outa the drawer just recently.




DavyG - Manta

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went to have a listen mate, but really cant b fkt signing up to soundclick.... try yousendit or whatever it is mate

yeh i agree mate it was annoying signing up to that soundclick website but i did anyway

it was alright man, but not really my style :P
it would of been nice with a fat bass line rather then that chirpy melody imo

but fairly good still, keep it up mate

cheers for that . yeah i would love to get it hosted someplace slightly more accessible. i'll look around.

thanks for the feeback Zozis. yeah i realised its not gonna be everyones cuppa tea i know what you mean about the lack of propper bass, i've always struggled with basslines. would love some pointers from the production savvy on how to make it better.

No big deal bout signing up with soundclick at all... Might as well go ahead and do it, most up n comer producers use soundclick and once youve signed up it logs you in automatically anyway.
Ok Davy... Constructive criticism time.. Pretty decent effort if this is your first track, sounds like it could use some crash symbols in there, to break up different riffs n sections, maybe a little more ear candy (short fx samples etc).
Overall i thought the tune had an early Beltram kinda sound to it.
But yeh main thing i'd look at would be your sequencing and timing of loop/section changeovers.. this will give your tune more solid defintion.
Other than that mate, its just persistance and time, keep on it mate

QUOTE (DavyG @ Jul 19 2005, 11:08 AM)

yeah i would love to get it hosted someplace slightly more accessible

you can always upload it on www.yousendit.com

it will then give you a link that will last for a week for people to download it

QUOTE (NARC @ Jul 19 2005, 03:05 PM)

No big deal bout signing up with soundclick at all... Might as well go ahead and do it, most up n comer producers use soundclick and once youve signed up it logs you in automatically anyway. Ok Davy... Constructive criticism time.. Pretty decent effort if this is your first track, sounds like it could use some crash symbols in there, to break up different riffs n sections, maybe a little more ear candy (short fx samples etc). Overall i thought the tune had an early Beltram kinda sound to it. But yeh main thing i'd look at would be your sequencing and timing of loop/section changeovers.. this will give your tune more solid defintion. Other than that mate, its just persistance and time, keep on it mate

nice one Mick, will go home tonight and play around with those ideas.

can you let me know where i can aquire some decent bass samples, i only have a handful and nothing that i really can use.

let me know mate. if you feel like sending me another sample CD i'll make it up to ya in wristies or beer next time in in town

if you dont wanna sign up, just click on the hi-fi or lo-fi links

QUOTE (DavyG @ Jul 19 2005, 03:58 PM)

can you let me know where i can aquire some decent bass samples, i only have a handful and nothing that i really can use.

Youll be surprised at some of the deadly bass you will get if you can find some samples of someone actually playing a bass guitar... Some synth basses out there can really do it, but alot of them are pure cheese and unusable.
Most of the bass ive been using is from vintage, real bass guitar loops, its just a matter of chopping a solid piece out of a loop and then dialling it in.. You can also use the Lo pass filter on your sampler to shape the bass to your taste.
Will try sort u a few samples, no wristies necessary

QUOTE (NARC @ Jul 19 2005, 04:11 PM)

QUOTE (DavyG @ Jul 19 2005, 03:58 PM) can you let me know where i can aquire some decent bass samples, i only have a handful and nothing that i really can use.  Youll be surprised at some of the deadly bass you will get if you can find some samples of someone actually playing a bass guitar... Some synth basses out there can really do it, but alot of them are pure cheese and unusable. Most of the bass ive been using is from vintage, real bass guitar loops, its just a matter of chopping a solid piece out of a loop and then dialling it in.. You can also use the Lo pass filter on your sampler to shape the bass to your taste. Will try sort u a few samples, no wristies necessary

el champion!!

thanks for the tips mate!

i'll PM you my home addy if you wanna send a CD.

I just joined Soundclick - hadn't heard of it before, but I have some songs I've been working on so will upload them soon. Just downloading your track now DavyG - will give you some feedback shortly.

I was dissappointed that my bandname was already taken! (was godbox ) So had to make one up on the fly - went with fnord.

My track is currently called 'The Un-Named One' - should be available later tonight once cleared by Soundclick.

I'd like any suggestions as to what genre my track fits into and also would be happy to hear alternative titles.

It's the Pre-vox mix by the way - I don't have a decent microphone.

davyg - have now downloaded your track and listened to once on headphones (even took your advice and had a pre lunch cone).

Not bad - needs a few things - a couple of 'risers' early or something to break up the long intro - I know it's progressive - just felt the into was a tad long. Also your 2nd to last breakdown sounds like the song is finishing - then it suddenly restarts. I quite like the sequencing in the last 3 minutes. It reminds be a bit of an underworld track - Cups? but not as dark.

Look forward to your remix

hahaha mad thanks dude!! yeah might re-work it a bit with a new bassline and im not entirely happy with the breakdown, its lazy and could be structured to sound a lot better.

thanks for the feedback dude, let me know when you get ya stuff up loaded and i'll have a listen!

You can follow th link in my signature. I just tested the lo-fi stream , sounded awful. So would definitely recommend the mp3 download - it's only 3.9 meg (128k 44.1khz).

I really need an effects processor.

song hasn't been cleared yet mate, they take about 24 hours to clear the track once you post it.


will download and listen when its cleared!

This post has been edited by DavyG on Jul 20 2005, 02:33 PM